Hi Ray,
 
I had meant to respond to your email but I got tied up. Another great poem to your growing list!  thanks for sharing.
 
Here're a few suggestions.  I've underlined the words:
 
Beautiful woman
we are uplifted in your exultation
with the Balafong and the Kora
the Riti and the Flute
and from the hilly slopes in the provinces
 
the muddy rice fields in Jahali Pacharr
and from the swampy wasteland of the Tann
the serene and fine beaches
the drums of the great Griots herald
they echo the laughter of your children.  
Beautiful woman
we are heartened with your gentle smile
with the Halam and the Bukarabu
the Sewruba and the Sabarr
and from the opaque waters of the shrine in Kachikally
the sacred ancient mounds of the stone circles in Wassu
the crescendo serenades with jubilant noises
the drums of the great Griots herald
they tell the story of your children at thepeak of twilight. 
Rene
 
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Mo Baldeh



On Thursday, November 7, 2013 9:04 AM, "[log in to unmask]" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
  
 
Correction: the shrine in Katachilly, should read the shrine in Kachikally  

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Beautiful woman 
we are uplifted in your exultation 
with the Balafong and the Kora 
the Riti and the Flute 
and from the hilly slopes in the provinces 
the muddy rice fields in Jahali Pacharr 
and from the swampy wasteland of the Tann 
the serene and fine beaches 
the drums of the great Griots herald 
they echo the laughter of your children.         
 
Beautiful woman 
we are hearten with your gentle smile 
with the Halam and the Bokarabu 
the Seruba and the Sabarr 
and from the opaque waters of the shrine in Katachilly 
the sacred ancient mounds of the stone circles in Wassa 
the crescendo serenades with jubilant noises 
the drums of the great Griots herald 
they tell the story of your children at the peek of twilight.  
 
Rene 
  
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